Richard, I really enjoyed your story, but I think the 9-minute read time might be a bit long. Perhaps you could consider breaking this chapter into three parts to appeal to speed readers, as most people on here only spend around 45 seconds to a minute per chapter. I'm a novelist myself, and I found that when I made my chapters shorter, I got more views. I appreciate your efforts and your great formatting and storyline. Thank you for writing! Please consider joining Mr. Plan B publication and write for I need talent like yours, thank you